"What Would....."

[Deleted member 26105]

To the little boy who was just kissed on the cheek on the playground by the girl he fancies: What went through your mind at that moment?

To the young lady, hiding her tears: How do you feel about your loved one whom you just lost to the next world?

To the young man, who puts on a somewhat cheerful mask: How do you feel without your first love? Do you miss her?

And to the old man, who just crossed to the other side: What regrets do you have? What do you wish you had said?

 

[pichu655889]

I feel that there should be more to this that just the above 4 lines..?

 

[bionioncle]

I think what you wrote don't relate to the topic when it's about the feeling

 

[Deleted member 26105]

@Pichu665889, It might be short, but I believe that not all writings need to be long, and it might make a little more sense if read as moments from a story.

@bioniocle, That may be true, but sometimes the name doesn't connect to the subject at hand.

 

[pichu655889]

@Pichu665889, It might be short, but I believe that not all writings need to be long, and it might make a little more sense if read as moments from a story.

@bioniocle, That may be true, but sometimes the name doesn't connect to the subject at hand.

It's just that I felt I was left hanging at the edge of a cliff after reading the fourth line. But then again that is an interesting way to end and if that was what you were going for then you've done it well

 

[PsyXcho]

It was so good that i wasn't able to pass without posting a reply .

Hope it wasn't short .