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    "Fallen"

    He has heard of Angels flying with broken wings,

    So he turns to his left,

    And then to the right.

    His eyes fall upon burnt, black wings.

    He thinks that if they can do it, then so can he.

    He flaps his wings in an attempt to soar.

    He starts to ascend, but then remembers that the fallen have lost Grace, and falls again.

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    Re: "Fallen"

    Wow. This is great! ...and a little sad.

    It feels like he is being restrained by himself and by what he believes.

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    Re: "Fallen"

    Very hopeful, but reality eventually catches up with him. Short and beautiful.

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    Re: "Fallen"

    Wow, this is awesome.
    Unfortunately I'm not so good using words in the way you do.
    Really looking forward to more of your work

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    Re: "Fallen"

    Thank you guys for the kind replies. Seeing comments like yours give my writings purpose
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    They're good, really! Looking forward to more of your work
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    Re: "Fallen"

    Interesting concept. It really drawn me in.

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