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    Re: WOW #1 - March / April 2016

    * |♚|KK|♚| wakes up with an energy boost coming from @Ignis; ~ (๑•̀ㅂ•́)و

    First,I want to talk about giving off awards.Like Ignis said,forum competitions awards are personal trophies.Award goes to the winner and cannot be given to another member who participated the contest or not.Though unlike SoTM,WoW has a participatory award so that's the only way if someone wants to get an award for %100 chance by only placing an entry for the contest.

    Secondly,I want to give a review on each entry.

    To @Rain Summerfields; When I first read your story,the idea of the plot got me interested...a girl who has her dream of becoming a musician and wanted to live beyond her ordinary life,the way she was so passionate and determined made me feel that strong power of believing in something from the heart.Whatever the issue is,or how it's difficult or easy to handle,it's still real and has a potential of becoming true.And it made me wonder how many people out there would be the best in the world at something they’ve never thought of trying…she did her best and wrote her own journey/as her path of life.It was a short yet really well written story.~

    To @JaxxBlaxx; To be honest,everytime I read your story I experience many feelings and ideas at the same time.It made confused,curious,excited at the same time.Each line I read,the story got more and more interesting.The plot behind is really amazing,and the way you reflected the story to the theme of journey is really enchanting.I have my questions to myself,about many things.Like I was so confused at the start,there was the feeling of 'unknown place' ,like when you feel and wonder 'where am I?'...the line 'I took a look at myself and the rest. I am “different” from them. ' shooked me,then I understood what the story was trying to tell us.The Gate,both as the name of the story and as being of the protagonist,is very clever and significant way of thinking.I could read it many times,and I'm sure I'll have many different questions appearing on my mind again.It was very well written and a captivating story.~

    To @pingtoryan; Your entry is the one that makes me confused the most,I read it over 6 times yet I still have so many questions regarding on the plot of the story.Like how those all happened,and why,or why the protagonist knew everything and was so calm even though he was summoned by such a different type of realm/dimension by a non-human person with special powers.Although this was his dream,it became real...so the protagonist is a mad person with psychological problems like the story of the title or something like that?I dont know,I have so many questions.Since I couldn't understand some of the things,I'm not sure what to say.But it was a journey indeed,a very different journey.To leave humanity behind and exprience a new life/beginning at another world/place.It was confusing for me,but wasn't bad.Instead it was exciting to expect and wonder about what will happen next and such.Thank you for writing,really nice written.~

    To @samyeung46; With one word 'wow',not the contest name :p .This story is the one that got me the most amazed,I could imagine/dream everything and put myself in protagonist's shoes to feel what he exprienced,it is perfectly written.The way how story continued it got more magical,it had that special aura to it...everything is beautifully written in details.I love to visualize while I read adventure type of novels and dream of feeling being there,this story had that great effect.I can read it over and over again,it never gets boring or tires me while I read.The ending was very sweet,and the whole story it self was very imaginative background to it.Only thing I have a question for is the name of the story.Besides of that it's amazing,very beautifully written.~

    Also to @Frankincense; I'm looking forward for your entry if you'll decide to give a try to place it,and if you want to write horror why not?Most of the horror stories are the best journeys/adventures.And it's always exciting to read.I hope you'll decide to place your entry soon.~

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    Re: WOW #1 - March / April 2016

    Admittedly, my entry came from one big story that I keep writing in my head to this day but never materialized, only scattered concepts of one single story but never a coherent one. That was one such piece.

    So I guess I'll leave things that happened there a matter of speculation, for now.
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    Quote Originally Posted by pingtoryan View Post
    Admittedly, my entry came from one big story that I keep writing in my head to this day but never materialized, only scattered concepts of one single story but never a coherent one. That was one such piece.

    So I guess I'll leave things that happened there a matter of speculation, for now.
    You can always edit your entry until deadline.So if you want to change some stuff,you still got time~

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    Quote Originally Posted by |♚| KK |♚| View Post
    Secondly,I want to give a review on each entry.

    To @Rain Summerfields; When I first read your story,the idea of the plot got me interested...a girl who has her dream of becoming a musician and wanted to live beyond her ordinary life,the way she was so passionate and determined made me feel that strong power of believing in something from the heart.Whatever the issue is,or how it's difficult or easy to handle,it's still real and has a potential of becoming true.And it made me wonder how many people out there would be the best in the world at something they’ve never thought of trying…she did her best and wrote her own journey/as her path of life.It was a short yet really well written story.~
    Thanks for the feedback kk. It's always nice to hear it, be it constructive or praise.
    I wrote it short, mainly because I was fearful I'd let it drag on if I wrote it any longer.
    also I had a dream like Audhild's, but unlike hers, mine never came true. : /
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    To @samyeung46; With one word 'wow',not the contest name :p .This story is the one that got me the most amazed,I could imagine/dream everything and put myself in protagonist's shoes to feel what he exprienced,it is perfectly written.The way how story continued it got more magical,it had that special aura to it...everything is beautifully written in details.I love to visualize while I read adventure type of novels and dream of feeling being there,this story had that great effect.I can read it over and over again,it never gets boring or tires me while I read.The ending was very sweet,and the whole story it self was very imaginative background to it.Only thing I have a question for is the name of the story.Besides of that it's amazing,very beautifully written.~
    Actually Chiaki and Ariya are both female, although I had written it to be vague~ Chiaki is twinny's character though I guess Im sort of just slowly building the world around these two...~ I expect her to be the only one who would understand everything that happened within the story since she is the only one to have read the bits and pieces I tossed together for the world ;p That said... I dont think I have a name yet..~
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    Quote Originally Posted by |♚| KK |♚| View Post
    To @JaxxBlaxx; To be honest,everytime I read your story I experience many feelings and ideas at the same time.It made confused,curious,excited at the same time.Each line I read,the story got more and more interesting.The plot behind is really amazing,and the way you reflected the story to the theme of journey is really enchanting.I have my questions to myself,about many things.Like I was so confused at the start,there was the feeling of 'unknown place' ,like when you feel and wonder 'where am I?'...the line 'I took a look at myself and the rest. I am “different” from them. ' shooked me,then I understood what the story was trying to tell us.The Gate,both as the name of the story and as being of the protagonist,is very clever and significant way of thinking.I could read it many times,and I'm sure I'll have many different questions appearing on my mind again.It was very well written and a captivating story.~
    Thanks for your comment! I'm really glad that the story made you feel many things. The whole story was actually based on me looking at some people waiting for a door to open, though the idea expanded into the story it is now, and I actually wrote the first half of it some time back, so it probably went out slightly confusing for you in the beginning, but all in all, I hope that your questions surrounding the story would be resolved~
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    Quote Originally Posted by JaxxBlaxx View Post
    The whole story was actually based on me looking at some people waiting for a door to open, though the idea expanded into the story it is now, and I actually wrote the first half of it some time back, so it probably went out slightly confusing for you in the beginning, but all in all, I hope that your questions surrounding the story would be resolved~
    That almost makes it sound like you didn't actually intend it, but the first thing I had in mind when I read your story was an unnecessarily complex democratic/bureaucratic process. At the risk of sounding political (not that that's what I want; it's just spontaneous), this was all over my head as I kept reading:



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    Quote Originally Posted by Ignis View Post
    That almost makes it sound like you didn't actually intend it, but the first thing I had in mind when I read your story was an unnecessarily complex democratic/bureaucratic process. At the risk of sounding political (not that that's what I want; it's just spontaneous), this was all over my head as I kept reading:
    If I were to say that the story is not entirely intended, that would actually be half-true, since despite the main character turning out to be the gate was initially one of my secondary/back-up ideas, I intended him to be at the very least "special" from the rest. The addition of the voice and some other things were some improvisations I made

    As for the story giving off a political impression... I have to say that I actually did not expect that nor was it intended (not that it's bad). On the other hand, I was thinking of a grand introduction as the characters were heading/marching towards their "destination"; now that I further reflect on it, I was rather unconsciously basing that part on the journey detailed by the Bible of the Hebrews from Egypt to Canaan...
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